My entry for Hideout of the week

Hi all

I have finished my hideout I think its cool what do you lot think?




Re-do Shorter , Made with the advice of Avelrod

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=J9R2E0r0pmg






First vitiation,

Removed,

sorry for taking is down but the shorter-one is far less annoying

I love it

Amazing hideout, first one I have seen to make a structured and enclosed building out of Tora's layout.
Great work turning the waterfall, font, and docks into centerpieces. Unfortunately, you failed your challenge to make it not seem small and in fact made it smaller. Haha. ;) Also, I recommend re-thinking the fire you have in the last area, it sort of clashes with the flow and theme of the whole area and seem sloppily placed. Maybe add another wow factor to the middle area.




One other thing...
This video is excruciatingly painful to watch. The pace is awful, and you repeat yourself several times, namely aside from pointing nice features out, your stalling in stuttering and stumbling over your thoughts. You need to revise this and edit it down. It could easily have ten, even twenty minutes shaved off of it. S-e-r-i-o-u-s-l-y. Edit it down. Prepare a bit of it like a speech. This was so slow I felt like I was in a nightmare wading through quicksand. And right click your damn gems if you're not going to level them up. Cheers.

Fair comment, this film was a test for using overwolf, for my new and first microphone that seems to be bugged with windows 7, and uploading youtube videos, I already though it was an awful film that is to long, a nightmare to watch and I repeat my self to much, and I repeat my self to much, and I repeat my self to much.
As far as making it look smaller I will have to disagree I think I have given space that I have not seen in other tora lay outs and I will have to disagree with the island, I do feel that is the best I could do after the level 7 upgrade, Funny I really did think I was going to get another bridge and another island, the original design was that the island was a walk through to the next island. I am not going to re-do my island because for better of for worse that is how I now like it.
I will remake the video again tonight I just hope my microphone stays un-bugged because that is the problem that I am really having and am worried about.

Thank you for your comments I will take them on board.